'Splish, splash, crash,' Trembled the shivering waves. The boiling sun was finally melting against the shivering waves. The Trail Blazers were forced to spend a day on the beach that was on fire!
The salty sea salt was making me unconscious. 'Crash, splish, splash!' A huge wave was piling upon us. 'Splish, splodge, splish' The trembling waves faltered. I could hear laughing kids and teachers shouting.
Suddenly I groaned, our time was up, we had to get out of the lovely shivering water. Like a sloth I slipped and slid out of the water. 'Shhhhhhhhhhh' I shivered. The air was cold and damp against my skin.
After changing into my lovely warm uniform, I was at the playground.
'Whow!' I shouted as I gripped the rope with both hands. We were allowed to play on the playground for 15 minutes. I was on the huge jungle gym.
It was the best school trip ever!!!!!!
The beach Trip. By Kieran Elcombe
"Aur" went the seagulls, as they flew above my head. "OK parents," can you all form a u in the water so the children are safely contained commanded Mrs Millett. When the parents walked over you could fell an electrical force of laziness pound into my body.
"As they dragged their soulless bodies across the beach'" and into the cold refreshing water. Then the shivering adult's formed a unruly u in the sea.
I love the writing Gauri and Keiran I can still imagine bein in the water with the description you used. Lovely writing.
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Wow Gauri and Keiran you guys writing is awesome:P
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wow I wish I was there I can imagine it
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