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Sunday, April 7, 2013

Luscious lolly learning!

Last week Room 20 had a fun toffee and easter egg experience. We paired up and took the roll of a controller where we directed our partner to eat the lolly or chocolate egg. We were able to stop our partner at any point in order to take detailed notes about the lolly or egg eating event. Here are some recounts about the event.

The Mouth watering lolly. By Lauren T

"Go!" I directed Tyler. She carefully twisted the wrapper off the creamy delicious Macintosh. She grasped the lolly in her hand and precisely brought it to her watering mouth. She was just about to pop it in then, "STOP!" I ordered Tyler.
As she had the toffee pinched in her hand the syrupy lolly started to melt into her fingerprints. "Go!" I chuckled. 
She inserted the caramel lolly into her mouth. She chewed the sweet as it molded into her teeth shape. As Tyler chewed, it got smaller and smaller.
Eventually the delicious treat was miniscule so Tyler took a final gulp and the lolly was gone.

Death for the Lolly. By Jack Cr

 "Go Mitchell!" I told him. Mitchell's hand rushed to the lolly sitting next to him. His index finger and thumb carefully pinched the two ends of the Macintosh treat like a crab. He twisted the lolly wrapper as fast as a tornado going round and round. "Stop!" I shouted. Mitchell froze and the lolly started to fall out, bit by bit. 
When I released him from the frozen state he grabbed the treat and threw the wrapper over his head while sinking his teeth into the the toffee like a vampire seeking blood. Slowly he ripped it in half and sucked on it. It was in his mouth and his eyes were transfixed on the yummy treat.
After he swallowed he closed his eyes and went into his own little land and hummed.


 "Gooey, gloop, Pop!" By Brandon

Sherrp, twist, twist! went Jack's lolly. "Stop!" I demanded in an angry voice.
"No...why didn't I eat the chewy lolly!" cried Jack.
"Sorry, but we have to." I explained. "Go!" I commanded.
Chew, chew.."Stop!" I said again.
"Not again! whined Jack. "My mouth is literally watering."
"Mine is too," I said with a glint in my eye, "but it's fun!" Then I let Jack eat his lolly.
"Yay!" said Jack gratefully. "That was awesome!"
"So was it good?" I inquired.
"Yes!"   




10 comments:

  1. good writing guys

    Liam

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  2. Wow, you guys did lots of great similes! We could see it like a movie in our heads! Well done, outstanding recounts!
    From Room 6

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  3. Excellent writing! I need to go buy some toffees now. Well done!

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  4. Excellent writing! I need to go buy some toffees now. Well done!

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  5. Great choice of wording lauren by Estte (vasti's sister)

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  6. Great work guys I like the detail in your wonderful writing. I think you will became book writer's, you guys will be famous!!!
    from Gauri

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  7. great lolly writing guys the syrupy lolly makes my mouth water, from selene

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  8. Great descriptive writing room 20!
    Tracey and Gareth Turner

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  9. great writing. I could even taste them

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  10. Well done room 20. Great Writing.
    from The Turners

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