The fright By Joseph L
I
closed my eyes as Mrs Millett instructed. I could hear loud giggles
across the room. I was getting quite worried from the start. The object I
heard was something like crackling plastic. My eyes was pitch black so I
couldn’t do anything so I just stood still.
The
next object sounded like something blowing a balloon. I felt like I was
surrounded by thieves alone in the dark- trapped. But somehow I was
getting excited. My heart was beating faster than ever like I was
running a 400m sprint and I still I heard giggles across the room.
My heart was pounding from the fright I got. I was still wondering what the mystery sound could be.
I
heard something behind me sounding like scissors. Now I knew what Mrs
Millett was going to do. ‘POP!’ went the balloon. It sounded like the
trigger of a gun. My leg made me jump off my the chair then over my
desk. “AAHHH!!!” I yelled in my mind. My heart was pumping faster than
getting slower. So that’s how I got the FRIGHT!!!!!!
THE POPPING MOMENT By Mackenzie W
The
moment I sat down and snapped my eyes closed crackling fireworks came
into my head. "Wait", I said to myself while my tan face went pale. I
noticed what was actually happening. Popping waking noises were
happening. My heart shocked like a flashing yellow lazer.
I
could hear giggles. "Was it my mind laughing at me?" It wasn’t my mind, it
was everyone. Was I the only one terrified? The table was rumbling from
everyone laughing. My head popped up. I saw the beautiful sight of light.
We all found out that the mystery sound was the colourful shiny balloon that got popped.
We all found out that the mystery sound was the colourful shiny balloon that got popped.
In
the end there were all kinds of colourful bits of balloon lying on the
floor. I was anxious and relieved at the same time. What a scary and fun
time.
Excellent writing Joseph and Mackenzie. Keep up the great work Room 20
ReplyDeleteKara Lough
Amazing writing Mackenzie and Joseph I wish I could write like that well done!!!
ReplyDeleteJade D
Wow! Your (Mackenzie, Joseph) writing is awsome!
ReplyDeleteTere's a lot of language features in there and it's very creative! :D
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ReplyDeleteWow! Room 20 you do some exciting things in your class it brings back MY school days memories. Loved all the creative writing and it looks like you all had a lot of fun. Next time I would love to come and join in. Keep up the great work!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for sharing your writing Joseph and Mackenzie. You both had me captivated. I felt my body tense up in anticipation of a loud pop! That's an indicator of really good writing, when the reader is drawn into the event. Great work!
ReplyDeletegreat pieces of writing well done
ReplyDeleteHarrison
I can imagine that fun time
ReplyDeleteMarina Lough
Joseph and mackenzie you did good writing. l can see a balloon in my head
ReplyDeleteLiam
great work guys I can remember the moment when the ballon poped thanks to you guys
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