The white threatening balloon- By Eric Z

POP!
A frightening chill went down my spine. When I opened my eyes I saw pieces of puny white rubber lying silently on the floor.
The blinding experience- By Micaela F

"Foof, foof, foof, .....POP!
I could tell immediately that it was the sound of a balloon going boom.
I was blinded by blackness closing around me. I felt sorry for the punctured balloon. My soul was drooping as if it had a heavy weight lowered onto it. Jolting shivers crawled up my spine like a spider climbing up a tree branch. The anticipation was over.
I opened my eyes to see Mrs. Millett smiling. We all opened our eyes. It was so funny!
The humungous BOOM! By Eliot H

I started to hear puffing. I started to panic as the sound hovered over my head, as if it were a hoverboard. My spine started to shake and I could feel invisible sweat trickle down my neck. I felt like I was becoming claustrophobic, and I could also feel my heart rate increasing as fast as the speed of light.
Just as I thought it was over there was a humungous "BOOM!" I thought a bomb had exploded, but there was suddenly a quiet mumble.
I looked behind me and there lay a white piece of rubber that looked like a soggy tissue. I was relieved that it was just a balloon, and promised myself to never fll for that ever again.
The strange noises... By Jennifer K

I heard "Crackle, snap!" I was frightened, nervous and excited all at the same time.
In a sudden, I heard puffing, loud puffing in fact. I felt like wind was whirling around me, making me confused and I had know idea what was going to happen next. The sound got much louder and louder like a cloud doing a race.
"POP!" It was the sound of a balloon! It was terrifying.
My eyes opened and lit up. All I saw left on the ground was a bright, white broken balloon.
great writing and very discriptive from Ella.C
ReplyDeleteGreat writing! I love it it's like a poem.
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