
The Swirling Blackness- By Nicole


Classmates were talking. It sounded very far away from me. I felt small and scared like a baby mouse. I wasn't too sure that I trusted Lukas.
The whistle blew. "At last!" I muttered. My eyes flicked open. I was so glad that I could see again.
The Blind walk- By Alvin
"WOAH" as I walked down the playground platform. We were doing a classroom activity which I thought was not fun, "BONK" went the sound of my head banging against the bridge.
" Don't tell me to do stupid things!" I yelled angrily at Ruben.

Finally the horrible tragedy of the evil commander was over. It was time for me to be the evil leader it was such fun having a slave at my command.
The Blind walk- By Emily
Pitch blackness. Right behind me is Amie amazingly leading me on an awesome yet absolutely terrifying journey called the blind walk. An explosion of feelings crept up inside me when Amie suddenly said, "OK, we're starting!"
I slowly walked forward drowning in the voices of the other people shouting, "Left, right, stop and go!"
"I think in a few more minutes..."
"OK everyone in the classroom!" Mrs Millett loudly shouted.
What amazing writing Alvin, Nicole and Emily. I can really feel your pain! Thanks for sharing. Mrs M
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptive pieces of writing! It makes me glad I still have my eyesight!
ReplyDeleteSusan (Nicole's Mum)
WOW!!! Emily, Alvin and Nicole those are three exceptional pieces of writing well don.
ReplyDeleteMaia Room 13
I really liked the language feature Alvin, Emily and Nicole. It felt a little bit pain ful when it said Bonk!. From Sunghyun
ReplyDeleteWow! I love your writing! It's so cool! Grace
ReplyDeleteIt was so fun writing great job everyone else from Emily.
ReplyDeleteVERY good writing
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